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Many people learn foreign language in their

            原文

            \"Many people learn foreign language in their own country; others
            have learned a foreign language in the country in which it is
            spoken. Which is better? Give the advantages and disadvantages of
            each and support your viewpoint\"

            Language is a mean of communication, to pass your thoughts across
            the table. With the difference in culture, customs, history and the
            tradition of the country the language, the channel of communication
            may be different. Every nation has explicit language that differs
            from that of others.
            So to maintain an affinity and understanding among people in
            different places across the globe, it is necessary to understand
            their language in advance. Therefore I agree with the fact that,
            knowing a foreign a language in your own country is better than
            studying it in the country where it is spoken.

            I believe that the advantage is that you are aware of the
            vocabulary, pronunciation and grammar which are the fundamentals of
            any language. You are left with the grasping of colloquial knowledge
            which I think is a part of conversation. That can be done through
            practice. But If you are totally new, then it really hard to adjust
            with the surrounding culture, and you end up bothering people around
            you with trivial things. You are not much welcomed in groups or
            friend circles as it’s difficult to pass on thoughts or chat with
            you and you feel lonely, not cared many times.

            If you are familiar with the early basics of a language you have
            quite a good chance of making friends, maintaining contacts easily.
            You can also speak confidently, fluently during presentations or
            group discussions at your work place which may be time consuming if
            you go through training in that foreign country.

            The positive thing of learning the language in their own country may
            be a gift to you as you pass through systematic, methodical and
            exact channel of reading, writing and speaking, i.e basics of
            language including grammar that improves your fluency and your hold
            on the language, which may not be possible by taking up a class in
            your own country. So the perseverance to pursue the skill of
            appreciating a language is important whether that may be in your own
            country or a foreign country.

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            \"Many people learn foreign language in their own country; others
            have learned a foreign language in the country in which it is
            spoken. Which is better? Give the advantages and disadvantages of
            each and support your viewpoint\"

            Language is a meanS of communication, to pass your thoughts across
            the table. With the difference in culture, customs, history and the
            tradition of the country the language, the channel of communication
            may be different. Every nation has explicit language that differs
            from that of others.
            So to maintain an affinity and understanding among people in
            different places across the globe, it is necessary to understand
            their language in advance. Therefore I agree with the fact that,
            knowing a foreign a language in your own country is better than
            studying it in the country where it is spoken.

            I believe that the advantage is that you are aware of the
            vocabulary, pronunciation and grammar which are the fundamentals of
            any language. You are left with the grasping/UNDERSTANDING of
            colloquial knowledge which I think is a part of conversation. That
            can be done through practice. But If you are totally new, then it IS
            really hard to adjust with/TO the surrounding culture, and you end
            up bothering people around you with trivial things. You are not much
            welcomed in groups or friend circles/OF FRIENDS as it’s difficult
            FOR THEM? to pass on thoughts or chat with you and you feel lonely,
            not cared ABOUT many times.

            If you are familiar with the early basics/THE BASICS of a language
            you have quite a good chance of making friends, maintaining contacts
            easily. You can also speak confidently, fluently during
            presentations or group discussions at your work place which may be
            time consuming if you go through training in that foreign country.

            The positive thing of learning the language in their/YOUR own
            country may be a gift to you as you pass/GO through THE systematic,
            methodical and exact channel /PROCEDURE of reading, writing and
            speaking, i.e basics of language including grammar that improves
            your fluency and your hold on the language, which may not be
            possible by taking up a class in your own country. So the
            perseverance to pursue the skill of appreciating a language is
            important whether that may be in your own country or a foreign
            country.